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These are
ginkgo days;
and we,
autumnling,
Arcadian
asphodel,
blooming
away from
the sandals
of shepherds,
who trample;
myrtling victors
and wreathing
the walls of
sea-lucked caves,
Arachne-webbed
and dew-bedecked,
where
jewel-rosetted
nymphs make
play;

and is it because
you are not
quite as
gentle
as me
that I
fear and despair?
chastity chaos
but never was
one so
considerately
fair;

it's simple
to love when
you're watching
the world with
such grace
from a place
in the
grass by
a lake far
away.
Slightly different from the way I usually write... I'll catch up on comments soon. I have been busy with reading group and making preparations for our newly formed poetry society at uni, Symposium. :) Poetica gratia poeticae!

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Parsat Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Student Writer
Wonderful demonstration of less as more. I enjoyed your use of line breaks to allow more "surface area" to the reader's eye...it really helped me as the reader to absorb the words and rhythms you employed. The mythological allusions are wonderful, and the poem is well paced. Well done.
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012
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LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Professional Writer
:wave: Hi! You have been featured by The Favorites Project at #LITplease!
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LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Professional Writer
and is it because
you are not
quite as
gentle
as me
that I
fear and despair?


:heart: Beautiful.
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ripari Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2010
i have never had a poem give me chills before.
this is exquisite.
this is more golden than leaves.
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melodythelittlepony Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2010
I'm honestly touched. Thank you. :)
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Leurindal Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2010
ah, finally - the Pre-Raphaelites' splendour is restored! :rose:
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melodythelittlepony Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2010
I meant to reply to your comment ages ago, because it meant such a lot to me! I always hope that reading my poems is something like looking at a Pre-Raphaelite painting, so I appreciate your comment a great deal. :)
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Leurindal Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2010
:) you're welcome.
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marine-ala Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2010
You have painted a very elegant and floral picture before my eyes! It has put me to a 'pastel' mood especially when I read the last lines! :heart:
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AlecBell Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2010
I love these Arcadias you create, Caitlin, where grace and sensuality combine!
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aquagirl7 Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2010   Writer
certainly gives me plenty of thoughts to think about and lovely pictures to gander in my mind :D

i'd wish i could give you a more in depth input, but i'm trying to keep up with all these deviations!

always a pleasure to read your work though :)
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Panda-Vision Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2010   Writer
Lovely sentiment throughout, and the second strophe is pretty much mind-blowing, all-round. Yup.

The flow at the end of the first strophe tripped me up at some point, I was reading it and it didn't make sense. But I've decided I just wasn't quite paying attention enough and missed the flow of syntax, as on second reading it was fine :shrug: who knows what happened there.

Oh.
And.
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:)
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melodythelittlepony Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2010
Thank you so very much. :) I thoroughly enjoyed your other comments, too, but I have been too embarrassingly lazy of late to respond. ^^;

Ahh, I can see how the syntax is a little strained... I'm going to add a comma for clarification. Perhaps that will help?

Thank you for the favourite. I'm pleased that you enjoyed it. :)

Also, is that Ian Curtis in your avatar...? Or the actor who played him in 'Control'? Or am I just on the wrong track entirely? =P
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Panda-Vision Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2010   Writer
That's fine, people are busy, instant responses not necessary. It makes sense to me now, I just stumbled a moment the first time. I think strained would be a little to harsh of a descriptions - maybe more slightly laboured. Do what you will, I'm not terribly worried it seems fine as is. Your call.

I assume it's the actor who played Curtis, since the image is from the theatrical poster for said film.

Thanks for the watch :)
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2010
I love it! :) I like the short lines. I can never make that work with my poetry.
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